After showing my teacher my work (via email) this is the response I got back!
From: Rob Dennis
Sent: Tuesday, June 13, 2017 6:50:21 AM
To: Harmeet Kaur; Richard Hodgkiss; Scott Goldsmith
Subject: RE: 2nd Draft of my documentary
Is the footage you shot in focus? If so, you need to blur out the area around their faces. If not, the vast majority of your film is just out of focus.
It’s also far too long – should be 5-7 minutes max. Introduce the issue in a voiceover (giving background and key info) and cut down the interviews dramatically (focus on emotion not fact – facts can be given simply in a voiceover) Conclude with a voiceover summing up your findings.
So I had to scrap most of my documentary as I was told I needed it to be 7-8 mins long. So I decided to take out the part of Deepa talking from the sequence like my teacher Rob has said to so and put myself in it with the camera focused, he had told me specifically to put me in focus cause most of my documentary was not focused for safety reasons. So I made a video of myself explaining Deepa’s past and replaced it with Deepa’s talking version. This reduce like 4 mins then I took some scenes out of the beginning and I also cut some scenes too.
Overall editing has bee a very long producer for myself, it took me a total of 20 hours to edit this documntry, which is a very long time but like its said ‘ success doesn’t come with out the swet and tears.